I've edited many videos. Not a professional, but have learned a lot.
1. wrong time of day. The scene is fine, but it should be at sunset/sunrise.
2. slow motion of wheels spinning, riding, cool guy with a girl making a look as it goes by, etc.
3. your edits need to be in tune with the beat of the music. They are not.
4. no more than 10-15 seconds of the same thing. It's ok to be 2 minutes, but should be in many locations: highway, woods, beach, kickin' at the trendy bar, tunnel, night, etc.



Good job though! I know how hard this can be!